6/4/18

Today in class we started off again with Mr. Rivers essay.  We picked it apart and tried to figure out what could have made it better.  We came up with a list: Tone → what makes us happy?, avoid arrogance, jumpiness within paragraphs, zoom in to one topic, trying for mature but is naive, revision and audience. Revision is the most important thing when it comes to writing an essay that could potentially get you money going into college. Mr. Rivers talked about how when he wrote this when he was seventeen it wasn't something that he did in class it was something he wrote at home on his own. Without the constructive criticism from peers or a teacher lead it to be not the best it could have been. Rivers then introduced us to a post on classroom under "college essay workshop." This document is going to help us to revise our essays to the best of our abilities. Four reflection questions are listed for us to answer. Then we will use what we say to make our essays into a better versions. The questions are very similar to the questions we answered about Rivers' essay. We have to make sure it follows the prompt, shows abstract qualities, zooms in on a specific moment, and to make sure active verbs and figurative language is in them. For all questions you need to have evidence from your article to show where exactly things are to help you really follow your essay. Our final drafts will be due June 17th and will be handed in on here. We worked on this up until the bell and tomorrow we will have a harkness discussion on chapters 6-16. Bringing in passages before hand is very recommended in order to help you throughout the discussion.