The College Essay Workshop- 6/4/18

Today in class we began by discussing what we would tell Mr. Rivers, as a 17 year old, on ways to improve his own College Essay. As we have done before, we came together to apply a critical eye and came up with some of the following ideas. We told Mr. Rivers to try to focus more on one specific moment, such as in the hospital. We told him, the be himself, and the lack of doing so made him come across as arrogant and naive. After reviewing his paper one last time he told us that we had to apply this critical eye to our own paper. Using questions similar to the questions asked on Mr. Rivers college essay, we began to apply what we discussed to our own papers. And speaking for myself, I really needed this revision because my paper is hot garbage. But with revision it might be garbage with Fe-breeze on it. Who knows?
The importance of this College Essay Workshop we are currently doing is to one; give us an opportunity to create an essay that will hopefully help provide financial aid from colleges, or even get us into our reach school and two; give us the chance to realize nothing is perfect on its first go around. Everything requires revision to allow something to reach its full potential. We see this everywhere in life. From lifting weights to playing video games, the idea "Practice makes perfect" is what is trying to be applied. An idea that has lost meaning in the impatient world we live in. A world where food is delivered from our house, and lines can be cut with money, the one thing that will always take time, a quality education. Patience is needed, and this workshop can be the first step.