6/1/18

What you should have completed for class today was the College Essay Rough Draft you had to make from one of the prompts you had made from the other assignment. Reason why I'm making sure is because in class we were told that the final revised draft is due in about two in a half weeks or so, so even if you didn't do it you have to have it done first then work on the final draft. Anyway what we did in class today was start off by talking about this and other deadlines we have to make because of end of the year crunch time including a harkness on chapters 6 - 16 on Tuesday and another harkness on every other chapter in the book the following week. We had another discussion on Holden saying do people always ruin things for you? An then we started to break down that other sample essay, the one about the theater kid. We pointed out what went right with it saying that the guy who wrote it was good at narrowing down a specific moment in this life, and giving a straight answer for the prompt, but what was wrong with it was that he gave too much of a straight answer, there was no buildup, there was no figurative language or any literary devices, and the vocabulary he uses was so bland, it made me cringe, it made him sound like a robot. Whats funny about this essay is that this is actually River's old college essay what you gain to learn from going over his essay is not let the final draft of ours come out as bad as his. By pointing out what's so terrible about his essay, helps to identify what to point ours, and what not to do like us horrible vocabulary. His essay wasn't that bad, it's just that you shouldn't want your essay to come out like River's.