2/2/18

Today in class it was a half day we focused our attention on the classroom page.  Starting independently looking at a counterclaim, what it is, and how it is refuted.  This counterclaim paragraph was a students in our class that Mr. Rivers selected.  We then came together as a class to pick the paragraph apart and look at the good writing choices along with how the writer pieced together all of the claims with the evidence and the analyses. The counter claim in this paragraph was that American weapons are used to conserve peace.  The writer then refuted this by saying weapons can be seen throughout history as weapons to inspire terror among foreign lands. After stating this the writer used words such as naive to refute the counterclaim along with using a credible outside source, and specific on screen evidence from the documentary.  The analysis is brilliantly put together because it connects the evidence to the claim by relieving the hypocrisy, and talking about the organization connects back to who is being brought up in the claim. The citation is correct and incorporated in the text, because of all of this the paragraph comes off to be very reliable.  In doing this it helped the class to see a what good writing is and to be able to learn from it.  It also showed us how to really pick apart and soak up all of the information in a paragraph. In the final five minutes of class we were asked to revisit our own paragraphs and edit them by taking advice from this example to make our paragraph better, and it should be revised by Monday.